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I believed that I did very well on this essay. I put a lot of detail and thought into it and furthered the analysis more than I have ever done on any other essay written in this class. That showed in the grade and I am very happy with the grade that I received.

Every single essay though I struggle with organization. Although sometimes it is because of the small amount of time and I rush through the essay, this paper I had more time. I need to focus on gathering my thoughts and putting them coherently on the paper. Sometimes I put events in the wrong order as well when it should be in chronological order. Making sure that this organization is present in all of my essays will definitely help increase the average score because it will make it easier for the reader to move through the essay and also make comprehension easier.

I thought that I did a fairly good job at analyzing the characters. Every quotation that was inserted within the paper always had a detailed description of how it fit within the topic that I was discussing and also explained how I saw the character develop. Finding arguments for June was very difficult for me though. I knew what I wanted to say about her because of the things that I had picked up on throughout the course of the short story, but it was difficult for me to put the right quotations down without them being too long or too wordy. The mom I thought I did a better job with, but I still needed to think through the quotations to make sure that the reader understood what I was trying to portray the mother as. This also goes back to the organizational aspect of the paper. As soon as I start organizing my paper better and ensuring that all of my quotations and analysis flow together, this will help everything overall.

I did not talk about Arnold Friend a lot. And he is the one that references the old lady down the block. He was the first to kind of show the ageing process within the story. Although it was present with the first introductions of June and the mother, the old lady showed me the final pieces that helped me put everything together. I should have included Arnold Friend in more detail to discuss how he greatly impacted the short story and helped place all the pieces of the puzzle together.

I really liked my paragraph about the old lady though. I did that one first and im happy with all the quotations that I picked out. I thought I supported them well with analysis and then how it ended the paper with the thoughts that I wanted to put in the readers head.

I know that I still have a lot to work on, but I am very happy with the grade that I received on this paper and will focus on the things that Ms. Clinch pointed out to better my papers and ensure that I get an even higher grade on the next one.